Thread:Roxasofmalice/@comment-24971427-20140717094830/@comment-10483040-20140727014205

O.o.......Okay out of the first few sentences its....Great.

I love your use of italics for sound effects

when it says ``This is what they want to show me``...Is that both Akira since it sounds weird...maybe its out of context....

Whos They?

And..........

O,o thats all  the mistakes....


 * Claps* BRAVO BRAVO THIS IS GOOD WORK!!!