Thread:Roxasofmalice/@comment-24971427-20140717094830/@comment-10483040-20140725230811

put the `` just right next to the We`re instead of a space.

I SAID BUT THEN CONNECTS A SENTENCE NOT STARTS ONE ITS, but then

Need an ending `` when he says ``Here you go kid``

and again one after ``Thanks sir``. But i would add a  the young man replied


 * SIGH* heres the bad part

What a perfect morning” Akira thought to himself.

NEEDS STARTIN QUOTATION

NEEDS A ,until SINCE THEN THE OWWAHHHHH DOESNT MAKE ANY SENSE

needs a comma after around...the first one

The had appeared sounds like crap. What about was behind him

Childhood can be one word

FIX THE U ALREADY

No ending `` after Behind!

Theres an odd silver box around Raven, Zion, and Keiko

No ending `` after bell ...wait you misplaced it PUT IT WHERE IT BELONGS

And...less mistakes Yay