User blog:Kousan Koenraad/One-Shot story idea (on Fictionpress.com) feedback!

Don't be mean if you don't like my idea: it's animals with superpowers. Here's what I have so far on the Doc:

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The forest was calm and quiet. The birds were chirping, and the insects were buzzing. Flowers and other plants were beginning to bud. Bees collected several specks of pollen from them, zipping back to their hives. The sky was an amazingly bright blue. The moon was barely visible because of the sun's loving light. Everything was at peace. It was springtime, a time of hope.

Suddenly, four shadows broke the silence. They were zipping across the leafy, composing forest floor. And they were causing chaos everywhere they went.

The trio bounded off of rocks and stumps, desperately trying to get away from the monstrosity chasing them. A brown dog, with wavy, light and dark brown hair sped alongside his two companions. "Why..? Why did this have to happen now?" A sinister, almost demonic, wolf head flickered from behind the flames. It looked like it was smiling. A demented, insane sneer. The dog didn't notice any changes in the area, save for the insatiable heat right behind him.

Fires raged out of control as a speedy little cream and blue rabbit wearing icy-blue shoulder pauldrons sped past the surrounding area. He was desperately summoning ice barriers with his sky-blue glowing eyes. A feeble attempt to stop the seemingly hard-headed villain hot on him and his buddies' tails. "Guys," the rabbit cried out, "what should we do? This guy is a maniac!"

"Quiet down, Frost, I'm thinking," a white female dog fiercely snapped. The animals sped down the dusty path, red fire still surging towards them. "Toby!" The female looked at a nearby brown and white canine. His orange-brown eyes softly stopped glowing. His matted, unkempt patches of fur and red collar stopped bobbing up and down. He was trying to put the fire out with his own power, large condensed balls of wind.

"Yeah?" He looked up from his position. Victoria was staring at him, almost snarling.

"You can't use your power," she exclaimed, "if you can't yet control it! You're not ready!"

"Oh." Toby stopped his attack and sat there, looking down at the ground, and feeling abashed. "Sorry 'bout that."

"It's okay," Victoria looked over at the nearby cream and blue armored rabbit. "Frost?"

"Yeah. I can take care of this." The small creature's eyes started glowing slightly. As he leaped into the air, a small barricade of ice walls quickly flurried into existence near the entrance the trio came in through.

"Okay, Vic," Toby walked up to the leader of the mission, "you got any plans?"

Afterward, the group quickly muttered up an escape plan. They were interrupted by a large increase in heat. "Um... What's going on?" Frost was looking around for either any suspicious activity or a place to hide.

Victoria looked in front of her. "Nothing good, I can assume that." The ice barriers were melting. "Get ready, you guys!"

Frost and Toby got into fighting stances, ready for whatever was getting past the rabbits' near-perfect defense. "You're Pathetic," a deep, malevolent voice growled.